Today Mr Yamasaki came to our class to teach a game to the writing group. The game was from Japan but in English so we could understand. I enjoyed the game. I kept winning. I need to is teach and play the game with others from my class. It was great fun playing so I'd like them to enjoy the experience.
Kia ora Ben, I like that you are willing to give up your time to teach others how to play this japanese game. I wasn't there to play this game so you could teach me. What was the best part of the game beside winning?.
ReplyDeleteHello Ben, This is good writing about the japanese game that you're writing group played. It sounds like you had some experience in the game that you played with Mr Yamasaki. Were you cheating or playing fair?
ReplyDeleteKia orana Ben, I like your writing but you had a few errors. Next time you write please edit more, also recheck if your sentences make sense before you publish your work. Besides the errors in your writing I still enjoyed reading your work. How do you think you could improve your writing? Reply ASAP for some tips.
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